October Memoir and Backstory Challenge - week#2
The theme is Relationships.
Memories or incidents involving our parents,
siblings, friends, romantic interludes, marriages, even our children or
grandchildren.
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Bob
I first meet Bob over the phone
Do you have any books about sex? he asks
Yes. Who are you looking for?
Maybe I am looking for you, he says
Maybe you are, I think.
We meet for dinner at a vegan place
He is twice my age and twice as animated
Life, he says, flows through him,
a gift from Brother Charles
Last summer, he tells me,
he traveled to Virginia,
and not to the cottage,
and stayed with Brother Charles in a trailer park,
with other seekers.
He shows me a photograph and points himself out
I'd never recognize him in the clown makeup
He was spiritually freed there, he says wistfully
One night as I lay in warm water in his downtown apartment bathtub
he challenges me,
Standing over me he demands to know why I follow a dead prophet,
Arms folded he steps back to lean against the wooden door frame.
We have our first ridiculous fight.
In time I note his tolerance does not extend to other drivers in rush hour traffic,
and he despairs,
frequently,
that his beat up old station wagon is a reflection on him
and in spite of all his inner work,
he still wants a new car.
Oh, I love this one! It made me laugh out loud at the ending. You are so good at this!
ReplyDeleteA clown? what an image. I enjoyed this post.
ReplyDeleteFunny and interesting. A man who is so "enlightened" needs to be a clown (who traditionally seek all the attention in a crowd) and your ending is just hilarious, but also touching, because he has a lot to learn about himself. I also loved the directness of your first stanza.
ReplyDeleteHah! You have a wonderful subtle humour, and you know just when to stop so you leave readers wanting more.
ReplyDeleteWow. Interesting way to describe it! I really liked it!
ReplyDeleteThank you all for your feedback.
ReplyDeleteI have to say I am truly enjoying this blog challenge. I haven't written like this in decades. You guys are giving me much encouragement. Thank you again.
Oh yeah. Bob sounds very much like my first husband.
ReplyDeleteI love the ending. He still wants a new car. I laughed :)
ReplyDeleteI'm really enjoying your posts.
Powerful writing and a subtle brilliant expose of the conflict between what a young person can see as an imposing presence and an actual "clown" ... Wonderful :) ... I felt I was watching you grow in the relationship with each word - so by the last line you could clearly see the contradiction between who Bob thought or wished he could be and who he actually was.
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